Published June 11, 2009
As the gentle breeze caresses the golden corn, I see the lord and lady
As the cascading waterfalls fall aimlessly into flourishing new life, I see the lord and lady
As the moons' many footsteps dance together in perfect harmony across a silver lake,
I see the lord and lady
As a sliver if light beams its exquisite radiance through the dense, lush trees,
I see the lord and lady
As a mother holds a baby like it’s the most beautiful diamond in the world,
I see the lord and lady
As life gives way to death in the perfect balance of nature,
I see the lord and lady
As the sky turns dark and cold, the light will always return,
I see the lord and lady
As the endless cycle of nature lets your spirit soar into unknown realms and frees your mind from all anxiety and evil, as you embrace the world with open arms,
I see the lord and lady.
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I really like it, and I disagree, i think It makes perfect sense, but vague. I think, though, thats it adds to the overall poem, its vagueness...I really Enjoy the repeated "I see the Lord and Lady" and I think everyone could could get a different meaning from it.
i do think though, you could have added a little more detail, just a few extra words here and there would have really made this poem "pop". Also, a few sentences don't make sense, maybe just look over it and switch around a few words, and I think it could be really great!
All in all, wonderful job, I hope you keep writing, and I hope to see more of your work in the future!
Thank you
I think that a couple of the sentences don't fit. like the one about he baby, but the rest is perfect. I love the way you wrote this.
Kepp writing
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